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[eighth_horizon]

Sam and Dean deal with the aftermath of the events of Born Under A Bad Sign – in a typically Winchester way. Written for sharonmarais. <3
4543 words, PG-13 for minor language.

Flinch

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Comments

[iamstealthyone.livejournal.com]

Good look at the aftermath of BUaBS. I like how you captured the sense of unease on both boys’ parts -- it’d be pretty impossible for them to just go back to status quo right after what happened in that ep. And I like how strong Jo was when the boys went to visit her.

Favorite lines:

Sam had been left with that to ponder. How much worse, if Dean had stuck to that promise to put Sam down should he go darkside. Had he put a couple right in Sam’s heart only to watch the demon then disembark long enough to laugh before dissipating, leaving him with Sam’s dying body, gone for no reason at all.

Definitely a devastating thought.

She had been so bent on trying to cause him and Dean to suffer than she had committed herself to another kind of prison of flesh and bone and blood just to get the chance.

I really like this; I hadn’t thought of it that way before.

Memory-taste of cigarettes and the coppery tang of blood, the too-close reek of fear on his clothes, an ache behind his eyes that crawled up his forehead.

Good description. Poor Sam!

There was contempt and hatred that wasn’t familiar in a human sense; it went so far beyond that it mutated into a nearly orgasmic fury. He kept his hands flat on tables or his own thighs to keep them from latching around Dean’s throat for those instants, waiting for them to pass.

Eek!

Dean smelled human and mortal and fragile, warm and anxious.

Good description. And also: Oh, Dean.

“‘Cause of dad, or ‘cause there’s no point bothering with someone unless we need them?”

Ouch.

it means something to talk to him now and tie the whole thing off. “

Dean makes a good point here, that both Sam and Jo need some kind of closure on what happened.

“You two gonna stare for awhile? Okay if I start up the jukebox, then? ‘Cause you’re boring the hell out of me.”

*snickers* Such a Dean thing to say.

He walked slowly across the floor, keeping his hands visible.

I love that Sam does this, and I like that Dean did it earlier, too.

She nodded. “He needs a lot of taking care of.”

Sam grinned, dimples and all.

*grins with Sam*

[minx999.livejournal.com]

Totally awesome fic. The emotions were so powerful in this and the dialogue was perfect.
This really could have been a deleted scene from that episode. I really like that Sam recognized the change in Dean and the remorse and sense of helplessness he feels over what Meg did while possessing him. That is so Sam to me.

Great details and insights into both boys' minds too. Just a wonderful read all together. Thanks for sharing it!

[tabaqui]

Oh, excellent. I love that 'first flinch'... And Sam still having those residual feelings of rage and hate...
*shiver*

[girlguidejones.livejournal.com]

Hey! Hi! Haven't read yet, but dropped a couple prompts back on the comment thread where we first chatted about it, so as to not take your FB comments here off on a tangent. Lemme know if none suit, I can surely think of more.

opens a tab on this for tomorrow- yaye!

[ansku]

Good one :)

[shehasathree]

AWEsome.

[innie_darling]

The will it must have taken, the rage. Oh, yes. Sam can give credit to John for this much at least.

Or better, she could have had him flay himself alive, skin and muscle trailing in strips, eyes gouged away and handed to Dean with bloodied fingers. YIKES!

Dean smelled human and mortal and fragile, warm and anxious. He was in pain and pretended otherwise, and to Sam it carried a mental tang that translated to a blending of senses, a high-pitched sweetness. That's just so sharp.

“Jesus Christ, take it for what it is, okay?” he said. “I’d say the same goddamn thing to Sam.” Oh, Dean!

Then he and Sam could go out later and stare at them for awhile, until everybody got tired of staring or Jo came out and threatened to kill them all. Ha!

[mgbutterfly.livejournal.com]

This was awesome. The way you captured and conveyed their emotions was perfect. This is just how I think it would have been. They are so much "the boys." And Jo? Wow. Perfect, in my opinion. You have such a knack for these characters.

You kick my ass with every story you write!

[amalthia]

I really enjoyed this, I wanted to see a coda for this episode and I liked what you wrote here. :)

[riverbella.livejournal.com]

Oh, very nice. Very realistic aftermath emotions. Exactly like Sam to want to go and apologize to Jo and Dean to not see the point but to give in for Sam. What impressed me the most, though, was your read on Meg. The mistakes she made and her impulsivity and failure to think things through. I had never really looked at it from that point of view, and I think you totally nailed it. (And it's a damn good thing for Dean and Sam.)

Oh, and another thing--kind of generally applies to a lot of your fiction. Your dialog and "voices" are great, of course, but you also have the ability to write long segments of pure narrative that are absolutely riveting. That is an art.

[daydream03.livejournal.com]

perfect!

[deirdre-c.livejournal.com]

I love this Jo, how close to the chest she plays everything. Excellent, hon! ♥

[sharonmarais.livejournal.com]

Hey!!!

Sorry, been away till yesterday and only just got to my flist posts.

Thanks so much...off to read it now
HUGS

[sharonmarais.livejournal.com]

and back again to say a proper thankyou.

I adore the way you wove it all together. Getting Sam's memories of his posession was good, I swear I could almost feel them myself...and the last line...perfect ending.

Than you so much.

HUGS

[eighth-horizon.livejournal.com]

Welcome back! And you're welcome, doll. Thanks for giving me such a good prompt. <3