sn:/disinterment

[eighth_horizon]

Salvation AU
22,070 words, gen, R for language, violence and gore.
Summary: Dean's current and former lives collide a little too hard and jeopardize everything - his career, his family, and his life.

Disinterment

Comments

[http://users.livejournal.com/amy_star_/]

Wow. Just... wow. I have so much love for your 'verse.

[graceandfire.livejournal.com]

Um, wow. I can't tell you how much I love you right now (in a purely non-scary, fan-girl way). That was...wow. WOW. I am so happy right now. I loved everything about this. I love this AU and this was...your Dean is perfect. Your Sam is perfect. Your Sarah is perfect. The kids are freaking amazing in their own right. Please never stop writing this Universe. And the ending was just right because yeah, Dean and Danielle back together but Dean's last comment about people only getting one chance to toss him aside rings so true. Except for Sam because Sam would get infinite chances (except Sam leaving more than once would probably have broken him).

I just loved every sentence of this but this:

“But I do,” she whispered. She sat up and leaned forward and kissed his forehead. “Don’t be mad at Sam. He’s your kid too, like me.”

That was just...ow, and perfect and pure truth.

I was so happy to see that a new Salvation story had been posted and to get a whole long story like this. Wow and THANK YOU.

[miriad.livejournal.com]

This was amazing. I love this universe and was just thinking to myself earlier today that I wished you would write more. So, you know, cool!

I really like Charlie. She's a cool cat and I look forward to more stuff about her. I like how different the kids are, how they fit into this world and this family, each in her own way. I'm really glad that there was Danielle in this one. I didn't like her at first but there wasn't much to go on, in terms of her character, other than she and Dean didn't make it. Now, however, I get a better idea of who she is and the fact that she finally has an idea of what Dean really did/does, she might really be able to be with him.

The bad guy? Scared the crap out of me. Sam scared the crap out of me, yelling at Charlie and swinging with that axe. Awesome stuff.

There was an, I believe, AU to this 'verse where Dean, Sam and Sarah ending up sleeping together. Is that actually an AU or did that happen in the world that this story exists in? I've confused myself and need a bit of clarification.

Anyway, this rocked my world tonight and has sparked my desire for long, plotty fics in this AU. I hope you'll write more, 'cause I'll sure as hell read them.

[dc-longwing.livejournal.com]

Wow. Love this 'verse, and loved this intense--and fabulous--story. SO much there; I'm going to be thinking thinking about this story for DAYS. I'm inarticulate right now, but I remember physically clutching my chest when I read this: Out of the darkness from Dean’s right came Sam. With an axe.
Dean felt his vision blur and didn’t believe it was Sam anyway, not even when Sam advanced and the creature backed away with a hissing sound. These were dreams of the dying - rescue did not come in the nick of time in the shape of his brother, not even in his world.
Yay for Protective!Sam. Yay for Allie and Charlie and the whole family. And yay for you.
Thank you SO much for this,
DC

[iamthedirtgirl.livejournal.com]

That just amazed me so much. This is story telling. I mean the real deal. I had my hand over my mouth through most of it cause if the intensity and the edgy, thriller aspects of it. I'm overwhelmed at the moment. You always write them so smart and i love that. All of it is good. I obviously got off on the dean hurt and the image of dean tossing dani over his shoulder. I loved the idea of allie just firing away and then later she's got the hunter look in her eye. she's changed now. it's in her blood and it's got the feeling that it's her destiny. I loved the interaction of charlie and sam. how much she fought but then just knew. her powers kicking in and the way she swung back and forth between being this scared nine year old and being an in the moment responsible adult, just jumping the car seat and putting pressure on dean's wound and not giving into shock until her dad was in safe hands. you wrote all of it so well. even the dog was accurate and the suspense was amped so high i just could not get over it. there is more. so much more to say her, but god woman. I'm not working on all cylinders anymore because of this. like how sam backed dean into the wall and was just in there. sam losing it on the bones. and more and more and more...this just jumped leaps and bounds into the land of top five favorite fics ever. I'm gonna go be stunned speechless for a while now.

[affectingly.livejournal.com]

That was just absolutely fantastic. Also, the bit with how Dani still has Dean's name and now they're sort of back together? It calls to mind visions of like them being in a situation where an outsider just assumes they're married because they're kissing and have the same last name, but when this nameless person says something about them being married.. they're all, "We're not married!" and are semi-offended that someone would assume they were.

In my brain, this is much funnier than it probably sounds typed out... lmao

Anyway, I love this universe. Great job!

[velithya]

I really really loved this, to the point of slight incoherance right now. I, I'll have to check back to give you better comments.

[mellaithwen]

HOLY....damn

granted I tend to say things like that when I read your stuff and the salvation au's are particulary awesome--but this? holy crap, man. I love that they have that kind of plan, and I LOVE love love love seeing the legalities (that a word?) in the spn world like you did.

The angst was top notch, and Dani and Dean? yay :D much yayousness

Charlie was perfect, so were all the girls, especially Allie :) really impressed by this one! So much in one go kinda leaves you breathless so apologies if this doesn't make all that much sense

[dolimir-k.livejournal.com]

Wow!!

And thank you! I was just thinking last night that I'd really like to see a story from you, but I'd never dreamed we'd get anything like this.

What a great scary story. I mean, I knew you wouldn't kill Dean off, but man oh man you scared me.

Loved this story, and Allie and Charlie's roles in it.

And Dani's pregnant!!

Just wow!!!

[innie_darling]

Wow. This story felt so much like "If Belief" - the threat is real and could only come to them, and yet only they have, know, and ARE everything that's needed to shut the threat down. It's such a fine line of tension that you draw, that there are sacrifices and collusions to be made, "marks on the soul," and they will be irrevocably different after this, but that might just be for the best. This is really such powerfully lovely stuff you're writing, Barb.

[lemmypie.livejournal.com]

I'm to busy flailing with my love for your writing to really put down in words my love for your writing.

This story had me hook line and sinker, Kripke is so your bitch is all I'm saying. You need to stop this insurance nonsense, we need to get the Kripster tie him to a chair (he might like that) and make him read your stuff. Then convince him the only writer he needs is you. Is this over the top? No!
GAH! I so want to say I want to lick this story, but that has been by go to compliment lately. You need something else. *Stop with the gushing Lemmy it's not becoming*

[apieceofcake.livejournal.com]

That was simply awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It was intense and scary and had my heart in my mouth .

I love this family, every single one of them and it's an absolute joy to read about them.

Thank you! And thank you for making it lovely and long :-)

[brandil.livejournal.com]

I have no. words. This is the best fic from the Salvation 'verse [so far, and god does that little caveat fill my heart with joy] and one of the best fics in the fandom. I am flaily, teary, happy, and anticipating the next one.

Incredible.

[tabaqui]

Oooooh, oh oh. Man. That was just damn good. Nice, tight story, excellent emotional 'stuff' and...Sam has all the keys.
Wow.

Lovely lovely addition to this 'verse.
maygra rec'd this.

[inimicallyyours.livejournal.com]

OHMYGOD THAT WAS AWESOME!

Especially the ending because I loved it and I always wondered just what Charlie could do with her gifts!

And Dani, at the end, hee! Wonderful story!

(although, did I miss the backstory with Dean and Dani? Because I don't remember reading how they met/married/divorced. Just the brief mentions in other stories.)

[snowphilosophy.livejournal.com]

Amazing! I love this Dean so very much. He's a wonderful dad and brother and he's great at his job. And he gets credit for being good which I love. I want him to have that.

I liked the monster in this story. Very creepy.

[sweill.livejournal.com]

I... I... I...
I want THIS universe to be THE universe.
I don't think I'm asking to much!!

[http://users.livejournal.com/__rini/]

This... was amazing. I honestly don't think there is anything else for me to say.

[sanj.livejournal.com]

I am so addicted to and in love with this universe. Fantastic. Totally wonderful. Thank you so much!!

[xnitelite.livejournal.com]

What an incredible story! Loved the way you combined the family with a truly spooky case story. I can't begin to describe everything I adored, but here's a short list, starting with Sam's decision to utilize Charlie's gift despite the risks (and Dean's wrath). And yay to Charlie for coming through!

Dean cut and bleeding to death... and that body snatcher coming across Charlie, hiding in the van, then going after Sarah and the girls... major chills here. Allie was awesome. *g*

Sam's reaction to nearly losing his brother--trying to smash that skeleton to smithereens then melding with Dean... wow.

This time there was no middle ground, just Sam and all the things that made him Sam, with Dean as touchstone, locked in place while Sam searched him.

What an intense, amazing connection they share, one that goes beyond bone-deep. *shivers*

"Dean’s not here right now," Dean said. "Please leave a message."

Bwah!!!

And Dani's pregnant! Ohhhh. Could it be a boy this time?!

Thanks so much for including me on your f-list. Look foward to reading (I hope) many more stories from you.

[zelost-mind.livejournal.com]

Oh man, i laughed, i cried, i love Allie, i love everybody...just love this...

[iamstealthyone.livejournal.com]

What a fantastic story! This was so very involving, and so very well told, from the plot to the pacing to the characterizations. I very much enjoyed all of its creepiness, and wow, was the villain well crafted. And the family dynamics were wonderful -- I loved everyone’s interactions, but especially Dean and Sam’s. I adored Dean being so determined to protect everyone and Sam being so determined to help Dean even when Dean tells him to back off. And I loved watching Dean with Allie and Charlie. And speaking of those kids … I can’t help but think of how they’ll be affected by the events in this story. Allie and Charlie both had to do and see things kids their age shouldn’t, and they’re growing up too fast, and it makes me sad. But I’m proud of them, too, for taking such good care of their family.

Before I quote favorite lines, I just have to mention how much I liked the details throughout this piece, like Dean cataloguing the skeleton in his house, bone by bone, or taking in his whereabouts when he wakes after being taken to the basement; Sarah closing the office door while Dean and Sam talk shop; Christo being such an awesome guard dog when they needed it most; Charlie reverting to thumbsucking. These touches really struck me while reading. Nicely done!

Overall: A big thumbs up. Truly outstanding work here.

[squee1123.livejournal.com]

eee...i loved this whole thing. it was creepy and tense and the epilogue just thrilled me to death.

this verse is awesome.

[iamstealthyone.livejournal.com]

Favorite lines:

He came and went night and day and sometimes for nights and days, unless Charlie was there.

Love how you phrased that. And love Dean’s utter devotion to his daughter (not that I’d expect anything less from him.)

A skeletal hand lay just a foot from his door, outstretched toward the door itself as if asking for help. Scraps of tendon barely held some of the phalanges together, and there were dozens of tiny bones arranged with care. The attached arm had been placed to give the rest of the skeleton an attitude of desperation, of reaching out one final time and hoping someone would come.

Eew, eew, eew! Marvelously creepy description.

She reminded him that he was taken no matter how many times he reminded her he had been divorced for six years, and then she wouldn’t elaborate. She just kept giving him that nutty stare chicks often gave, the one that said you know what I’m talking about even when he didn’t. It was often followed by the one that said well if you don’t know, I’m not going to tell you! and it was just crazy.

LOL at the whole Men Are From Mars, Women are From Venus moment.

“If you’re in danger, so are we,” Sam said, voice suddenly calm, and that was much worse than the rage; Sam had descended all the way to dangerous that quickly. “If anything happens to you, Dean, it will kill us all.”

*gulps* Powerful dialogue here.

“You wouldn’t do that to Charlie.”

“But I’d do it for Charlie,” Dean said.

I love how Dean twists Sam’s statement around just enough to make his point. Oh, Dean.

people who were not an instant from choking with terror because they couldn’t find someone they couldn’t reasonably go on without.

Oh, Sam.

Not the first time he’d been left tied up and naked, but the least fun, hands down.

LOL!

She burst into tears. “You’re scaring me,” she sobbed. “Sam I want my daddy!”

He did shake her then, never feeling the tears on his own face, his desperation winning over his self loathing. “Then find him!” he said, not shouting but close, as close as he’d ever been with her or his own girls.

This just breaks my heart. *hugs them*

It was a scalpel. Dean realized then what he was in for. It was going to put him on.

Ack! *covers eyes* This is not happening, this is not happening …

The blade was so sharp that it sliced through the restraints with barely any pressure. Sam caught Dean against him and then struggled not to slip in his brother’s blood.

*whimpers* My poor boys!

When it was silent again, she lifted her head.

She was going to be in trouble over the windows, she just knew it.

I love this, because it’s so little-kid to think about something like that in this moment.

It was not waiting for them in the garage, or in the driveway when they pulled out. Sarah was almost disappointed. She would have enjoyed running it down.

I love Sarah. :)

“Somebody clocked you, though,” he said finally, hoarse. He didn’t even try and move, because he could feel every inch of where he’d been laid bare to bone. “Sam get drunk and smack you around?”

*g* Of course Dean would wake up and joke around. *hugs him*

“Sam,” Dean said softly, voice underscored with a growl of rage, “I love you. But when I get out of here, I’m going to fuck you up.”

Yeah, of course Dean would be pissed. Poor Sam was in such a tough spot with asking Charlie to find Dean.

“Please don’t be mad at Sam,” she said. “Please. I knew I could find you. Me and Sam, we need you more than anybody, ever.”

Such a good girl. *pets her*

“I’m sorry,” Sam whispered. “Dean - “

“Dean’s not here right now,” Dean said. “Please leave a message.”

*g*

“Til death do you part,” Sam said.

Dean gave him a sour glare. “Death doesn’t seem to do much for ending anything, if you haven’t noticed,” he said.

Sam laughed.

Great ending. It’s good to see Dean and Dani reunited. I didn’t know if you’d actually go there, but I’m glad you did, because as much as part of me thinks these boys can’t have a happy ending, I want them to have one, KWIM?

Thanks for a great read!

[ainael-1984.livejournal.com]

I just wanted to say how much I REALLY enjoy this AU universe. The characters seem so real and life-like and just AWESOME! ::sends you massive loves::

I'm also really interested to see how Allie and Charlie develop as characters, too :D